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Wednesday, September 22, 2010

3WW--Three Word Wednesday (part 2)

A couple of weeks ago I wrote a short character sketch for 3WW.  The character has remained at the back of my mind like an itch I can't quite reach.  I thought I'd revisit her and try a little experiment.

Without any mapping out, I'm going to try and tell her story using the 3WW words as my guide.  I'm going to try and keep each section into bite size pieces, but I make no promises.

Find the first post here.

Now, let's see where this goes. 

I first met Liberty when we were in fifth grade.  If you were to look at our class picture, I'm the one in the front row, my breasts beginning to ripen and my skin, perfection.  Liberty's the one in the back, the forehead and frizzy hair barely visible between two boys' shoulders.  If it had been anyone but Liberty hiding like that, Mr. Johnson would have made them go to the front row.

But not Liberty.

Even the teachers seemed to avoid looking at her.  Her slow and shambling gait always caused traffic jams in the halls.  It was as if no one wanted to risk brushing her while they walked past.  

You might think you know where the story is going, want to give me a nudge to get into the juicy tales about how I, the blessed popular, made school a living hell for Liberty.  Then you'll want to hear about how she overcame her awkwardness and in the end, wound up with the quarterback.

You'd be wrong.

Dead wrong.

I have a feeling this is going to go to a dark place.  I don't want the pretty pink princess of a narrator to be a pretty pink princess, I do want her to be flawed, but I feel like Liberty is going to be an anti-hero at best.  Maybe a tale of obsession, but reversed?

Now I think I'm just rambling, so I'll stop there.  Feel free to let me know what you think in the comments.  Remember this is without planning, and little/no editing, so be gentle with me.

But please point out glaring errors. :)


Thomma Lyn said...

This is highly intriguing, and I want to see where it goes! I like the idea of a tale of obsession reversed, and your wording "...wrong. Dead wrong" makes me think that, at some point, a dead body is going to turn up. The narrator's? Liberty's? Or perhaps somebody they kill together, accidentally or on purpose...? Definitely feels like a dark direction.

Gemma Wiseman said...

Wonderful sense of dark mystery bubbling here! Love the threads dangling like loose lives!

Deborah said...

Brilliant, a small slice but had me straight away, I really wanted to read more!

Susannah said...

I like this very much and would love to know more about these two. :-)

Thom Gabrukiewicz said...

A great start to hopefully something much longer. I don't mind the princess as narrator at all.

VL Sheridan said...

Maybe the point of the narrator is she's remembering someone she thought would have a profound effect on her life and Liberty didn't, so now the narrator's wondering why she felt that way at that time? The story has a strong opening; just let it write itself.

Witless Exposition said...

Thanks for all the positive feedback guys! Makes me think maybe I'm doing something right after all!

gautami tripathy said...

I like the narrator's thought processes!

baton of time

Ramesh Sood said...

You have indeed taken all the liberty to write without any plan created something so interesting trust me I can only say this.. hats off to you..

Andy Sewina said...

I like the way the narrator communicates with the reader, stay with it and in a few weeks you'll have built up quite a story!

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