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Sunday, September 11, 2011

Six Sentence Sunday


This excerpt comes from the beginning of my serial story, Taking Liberty. Elizabeth is at her classmate's funeral trying to comfort a friend.
I reached out to take her hand and give the blanket cliches that cover the ground at funerals.

The words caught in my throat.  My hand was shimmering, changing before my eyes.  I was vibrating, shot through with electricity, melting. Some...Other was waiting behind a dark curtain in my mind.  I could feel it there waiting.
Hope you enjoyed it.  Feel free to check out the rest of the story if you're so inclined.  Looking forward to seeing everyone else's great entries!

7 comments:

Alex J. Cavanaugh said...

Full of tension!

Jen said...

The tension that's building is really good. Great six.

Su said...

Wow, very cool!

Sandy Nachlinger said...

Vivid scene. I'm looking forward to learning more about this "other."

Lindsay said...

Tension. Great six

1000th.monkey said...

'blanket cliches'...great line ;) Perfect way to describe it!

Witless Exposition said...

Thanks for all the encouraging comments guys!

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